Sunday Snippet June 12, 2016

Posting from Book 6 of The Academy of the Accord this month.  Things are a bit tricky since some of this book runs concurrently with the end of Book 5 (and the start of Book 7) but focuses on a different pair of students: Rahmael, a ten year old first year cadet and a natural Warder, and Shander, a five year old apprentice wizard.  The two of them have “found” each other and share the special bond that goes along with it.

In this scene Rahmael has stayed at the school for winter break and he, Shander, and others are at the Winter Festival in the village.  There is a merchant caravan in town – the last one until spring.

(This is still a WiP and hasn’t seen an editing pen yet so just ignore the awkward sections and pretend it’s all nicely polished. Okay?)

Picking up a few sentences from last week, in which a stranger with a merchant caravan claimed to be Shander’s father.  Something about him makes Shander uneasy, however, and Rahmael’s instinct to protect his wizard has flared, making him stay between the two of them.  Rahmael sent Shander to find the captains (Kordelm and Wellhym) and their wizards.

Rahmael and the stranger are still in a standoff when Draethlen and Senzu arrive.

 

“Trouble, Rahm?  Shan sent us,” Draethlen added by way of explanation.

He took a step back. “I don’t know, Drae,” he said softly.  “This man claims to be Shander’s father, but…”

“But?”

“I don’t know. I…”  He frowned.  “I stepped between him and Shan.  I didn’t think about it, I just… did.”

Draethlen frowned and glanced at the man and then Senzu.  “It sounds like Warder instinct, but I’m not feeling a threat.  Unless it’s just specific to Shan.”  He studied the man and frowned slightly, a faint twinge of recognition nagging at him.

“Where is my son?” the man demanded, and they both turned and stepped between him and Senzu.

“Shander will be back as soon as he finds my captains,” Rahmael replied calmly.

“Yhon’s getting them.” Brythel joined the line of cadets.

Shander moved to his Warder’s side and Rahmael gave his wizard a one armed hug then gently pushed him back.  Senzu put a hand on Shander’s arm and drew him behind the protective line.   

 

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14 responses to “Sunday Snippet June 12, 2016

  1. Sounds like they have each other’s back! Great snippet.

  2. Interesting how they all instinctively form a line against the man. Cant wait to see what happens next. I love the world building in this story! I did find the character blocking a bit confusing though. Is Shander there? Or is he still gone fetching the captains?

    • I’ll keep the confusion in mind when I get to the editing of this. I think it’s probably clearer in the full version, though. (Plus, the names won’t all be getting dumped on you at once in the full version — you’ll already know all the characters.)

      Yes, Shander is there. He went to get the captains, ran into two other students (Draethlen and Senzu) first, and sent them to help Rahmael. He then found Yhonshel, who is another of the school’s leaders, and Brythel, another cadet. While Yhonshel is getting the others, Shander and Brythel joined the other three students.

  3. chellecordero

    It certainly seems that you’d have to go through all of them if you want to do harm to one.

  4. elainecsc2013

    I hope they don’t give him to the man. He makes me apprehensive.

  5. It seems he is not getting through the line any time soon. Good snippet.

  6. So glad they’re keeping him safe. Probably good to go with their instincts here.

  7. Good snippet. I like the bond between them all.

  8. Shander has some great friends. We should all be so fortunate. 🙂

  9. Good to go on the instinct. Looks like their all safe for now.

  10. Always trust your gut! I love how they all bond together to protect Shander, even though Rahm isn’t quite sure what’s wrong yet. They all trust each other enough to not overlook instincts, that speaks deeply about all of them as a group. Great scene.

    (Though for editing purposes I didn’t understand Shander coming back either. He was there, then he wasn’t, then he suddenly was again and I didn’t “see” him coming back so to speak.)

  11. This seems very mysterious. I wonder who that father really is and what he wants!

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