Thought I’d give you all a break from Song and Sword (I’ll probably come back to it in December) and spend the month posting excerpts from whatever I’ve written for NaNoWriMo the previous week.
I’m working on a prequel to the Academy of the Accord series. The tentative title is Creating Accord and it’s set a few generations before the series.
This snippet is the aftermath of a battle between wizards and soldiers. Aslir managed to get Zin away before the main fighting started and has gone back to check on the situation. He found a room full of dead wizards, with one bound to a chair in the center of the room.
“Panima,” he whispered softly, and her head came up.
“Where are you?”
“Behind you. I’m invisible.”
“And Zin?”
“Somewhere safe.”
“They’re looking for the two of you. Kraskir. Kraskir gave them your names, said you were the only two missing. He helped them. Helped them restrain me.” Her voice was flat, broken, with only a trace of bitterness.
“Yphier?”
“They killed him.” Tears filled the broken places in her voice. “He was the gentlest person I ever knew and he tried to stop the fighting and they killed him. He was a healer. He would have helped their injured if they’d asked but they killed him. And they left him here…”
Aslir followed her gaze to the body at her feet. Her brother’s dead face looked up at them and he knelt and closed his eyes. “I am so sorry,” he whispered.
Oh no …such a sad moment. Well conveyed.
I adore this line “Tears filled the broken places in her voice.” Excellent snippet this week!
Too sad!
Powerful and sad….an excellent excerpt.
I’m going to quote Veronica’s comment, because I agree with it, but I’m also going to add a bit. “Powerful and sad . . . AND SPOOKY.”
OMG talk about heartbreak–the tears are springing out :( Very vivid snippet, I enjoyed it very much :)
What a powerful scene. I love this line: “Tears filled the broken places in her voice.”
This is just so sad, yet done so beautifully… I seriously feel for her.