Rainbow Snippet for 10-28-2017

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More from Onyx Sun, (which really will be finished some day) picking up from last week. Taliya is explaining what she felt from the ship when Ayess first came on board.

“It was a… a storm of emotions.  So many, so fast, and all mixed together.   Fear, terror, regret, pain, feeling… sickened… by what had happened… grief, guilt, and more pain… so much pain… Not… not physical, not even mental or emotional, but like his soul was aching and sick…”  She was shaking slightly.  “He didn’t mean to do it, Ayess.  He didn’t want to do it, but…”  She shook her head and looked up at him, a silent plea in her eyes.  “He didn’t want to,” she said again, her voice tight and distant.

Ayess’ race does not have words for he/she/his/hers, etc, because they are (for lack of a better term) hermaphroditic. Their pronouns to refer to other members of their race are “ni” (for he/she/him/her), “ni-es” (his/hers), “ni-en” (they/them) and “ni-en-es” for theirs.








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6 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 10-28-2017

  1. Wow… beautiful and painful at the same time.

  2. I can almost feel how powerful and overwhelming this must be for her to feel all at once.

  3. So many emotions…well done!

  4. Emotional scene! I wonder what was controlling him?

  5. That’s a truly evil point to stop! But… what? I’m now picturing all sorts of horrors.

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