Rainbow Snippet for 9-30-2017

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More from Onyx Sun, (which really will be finished some day) picking up from last week.


Ni drew a deep breath, staring at the chamber. 

“He is a Ferelian.  They…”  Ni frowned.  “They are not native to the planet we were on.  They are from Ferelis Three and they are… They are a primitive people, they do not have space travel.”

“Then he did not get there by himself.”  She frowned.  “Isn’t Ferelis a proscribed system?”

“Very,” Ayess said.  “The penalty for going there is death.”



Ayess’ race does not have words for he/she/his/hers, etc, because they are (for lack of a better term) hermaphroditic. Their pronouns to refer to other members of their race are “ni” (for he/she/him/her), “ni-es” (his/hers), “ni-en” (they/them) and “ni-en-es” for theirs.








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11 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 9-30-2017

  1. I am enjoying the the … er … alien-ness of your aliens :)

  2. AM

    How did he get there indeed. It’ll be interesting to find out.

  3. So someone purposefully went to a forbidden world to get this creature to… sabotage? That might be a leap, but it’s where my mind is going first.

  4. Interesting…you’re drawing me more and more into this universe you’re sharing snippets of information about it, bit by bit.

  5. Ferelis sounds like a planet I don’t want to visit!

  6. This getting really interesting.

  7. Things get even more intriguing. I wonder what they are going to do with the ferelian.

  8. Uh-oh. Are they planning to go there?

  9. So how did the alien get onto their ship? And why the death penalty? Did I mention I’m loving this?

  10. Interesting. So how did he get there?

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