Rainbow Snippet for 9-9-2017

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More from Onyx Sun, (which really will be finished some day) picking up from last week.


“Ayess?  What is it?” 

Ni-es eyes were hard, ni-es nostrils flared, and ni-es breath was coming in short hard gasps.  Ni didn’t seem to have heard her so she stepped forward, placing herself between ni and the cryo unit. 

“Ayess.  Look at me.”

Slowly ni responded to the command in her voice and looked down into her eyes, ni-es body relaxing and ni-es breathing slowing.

“What’s wrong?” she asked softly, placing a gentle hand on ni-es arm.

“That… that is the… the thing that killed the others in my exploration team.”


Ayess’ race does not have words for he/she/his/hers, etc, because they are (for lack of a better term) hermaphroditic. Their pronouns to refer to other members of their race are “ni” (for he/she/him/her), “ni-es” (his/hers), “ni-en” (they/them) and “ni-en-es” for theirs.








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14 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 9-9-2017

  1. Oh geez, that had to be a shocking discovery for Ayess. 😞

  2. AM

    That’s terrifying! I wonder how it killed them.

  3. CF White (@CFWhiteUK)

    Whoa! That last line. Great snippet. I need more.

  4. jlgfellers

    Oh, man. Panic mode. But ni is being necessarily calm.

  5. The last sentence blew me away, poor yyess

  6. Oh wow. Now I get her spooked reaction. Fab snippet.

  7. louiselyons013

    Scary! I’m interested to learn more about this monster.

  8. Ouch. I didn’t see that one coming! (I suppose neither did Ayess.)

  9. Oh wow. I did not see that coming!

  10. Pekky

    This is very chilling!

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