Rainbow Snippet for 8-12-2017

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Picking up from last week.  Ayess thinks he has found the source of the strange random energy flux and ni and Taliya are on their way to the cryo chambers.

“But they’re empty,” Taliya protested, following ni.  “They shouldn’t be drawing power at all.”

“Even empty they will draw some power.  Just enough to maintain their circuits and the integrity of the field. But for some reason, one of them is drawing more than it should, but not all the time.”  Ni frowned.  “It’s actually drawing more than it should even if it was in use.”

“Is it going to blow up?”

“Probably not,” ni replied as ni opened the door to the room that housed the cryogenic units. The coffin-like chambers were dark, an array of dim lights indicating that they were empty but had power. 

 

Ayess’ race does not have words for he/she/his/hers, etc, because they are (for lack of a better term) hermaphroditic. Their pronouns to refer to other members of their race are “ni” (for he/she/him/her), “ni-es” (his/hers), “ni-en” (they/them) and “ni-en-es” for theirs.

 

 

 

 

 

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11 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 8-12-2017

  1. I love the term ‘ni’ for gender neutrality or hermaphroditism. (heart) Intense description, loaded with detail, yet keeping focused on the plot energy.

  2. That energy draw seems ominous… 🙂

  3. AM

    I don’t know if “probably not” is comforting. Too much room for “possibly yes.”

  4. jlgfellers

    I agree with AM… not comforting, and, yes, ominous. Is the stage being set for something traumatic? I wonder…

  5. “Probably not” does NOT feel comforting 🙂

  6. CF White (@CFWhiteUK)

    Intriguing… “probably not”, eh? That’s worrying! Great snippet. I need to know what happens next…

  7. Can’t wait for the next installment! This one kept me on the edge my seat, wondering what will happen next. 🙂

  8. I’m loving this story. Between the relationship drama and this mysterious energy, it’s got me intrigued. 🙂

  9. Something strange is going on. That’s for sure. 🙂

  10. Jana Denardo

    Ooo looking forward to seeing what the energy drains are about.

  11. I’m so intrigued by this story

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