Rainbow Snippet for 6-10-2017

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Picking up from last week’ snippet of Onyx Sun.

“Don’t lie to me, Luz.”

“I’m not.  Please, Taliya.” 

Taliya closed her eyes so she wouldn’t see the tears in Luzita’s.  “All right,” she said finally.  “You can stay.  But if there is any trouble, you go, not Ayess.”

“You would choose… that… over me?”

“I know what you were like in school, Luzita.  If there’s trouble, I’ll know where it started.”  Taliya was surprised at the coldness in her voice.

“I…”  Luzita lowered her eyes and nodded slowly. 

Taliya sighed. “It’s been a long day – for both of us.  I’m going to bed.”








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8 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 6-10-2017

  1. You can certainly feel the tension and emotion here; excellent snippet <3

  2. siobhanmuir

    I’m not sure I’d let her stay long if she refers to my crewmate as “that”. Great snippet, P.T. :)

  3. Taliya is being firm, though she seems pained by it.

  4. Wow…Luzita is quite prejudiced. Maybe a little jealous as well?

  5. AM

    Luzita sounds like she has a few things to learn.

  6. louiselyons013

    You can feel the tension between them in that scene.

  7. Jana Denardo

    Luzita sounds like she has a long way to go.

  8. I get the feeling that eye-lowering was a bit of an act.

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