Rainbow Snippet for 5-20-2017

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Picking up from last week’ snippet of Onyx Sun, in which Luzita accused Taliya of finding her only so she could gloat.


“Yes, gloat.  And control me.  Force me to accept whatever miserable freak or low life you come across.”

“For your information, I left home to find you because I missed you, because I loved you.”

Taliya took a step forward and Luzita turned her back on her. “I’d tell you not to touch me, but you own me.  But if you make me pleasure that… monstrosity that met me I swear I will die first.”

“Ayess is my second in command.  Ni will be treated with proper respect due to any person.” 

Taliya’s voice was cold and hard and a brief shiver went through Luzita at the sound of it, but she recovered and snorted in derision.  A moment later she gasped as the cold metal of the implanter touched her shoulder. There was a tug and tingle as the chip was removed, and a moment later the collar loosened and Taliya pulled it from her neck.

“You are free.  That’s why I didn’t bring you to the ship myself: I was getting you removed from the slave registry.”  Taliya’s voice was cold and held more than a trace of disappointment.


Ayess’ race does not have words for he/she/his/hers, etc, because they are (for lack of a better term) hermaphroditic. Their pronouns to refer to other members of their race are “ni” (for he/she/him/her), “ni-es” (his/hers), “ni-en” (they/them) and “ni-en-es” for theirs.)








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7 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 5-20-2017

  1. louiselyons013

    Nice snippet, and I like the fact they have a whole set of pronouns for their race – interesting :)

  2. I wonder why Luzita is so convinced that Taliya betrayed her? Is this more of Taliya’s mother’s influence, sneaking in and playing her hand from the background?

  3. AM

    Luzita is pretty quick to assume things about Taliya. Makes me wonder what happened, both between them and during Luzita’s captivity.

  4. siobhanmuir

    Oh the tension and emotion in this snippet is lovely, P.T. Well done. :)

  5. Jana Denardo

    She is definitely ready to believe the worst of Taliya

  6. I’d love to know the backstory on these two…

  7. Poor Taliya. I’m sure she is disappointed. (Hopefully just for now.)

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