Rainbow Snippet for 3-18-2017

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I’m still posting from Onyx Sun, a science fiction novel that is currently in revision. The revisions are turning out to be more complex than originally expected so the release date is, um, to be determined. (I’ve given up trying to predict one, but I have at least one more round of revisions after the current one.)

I’m skipping ahead just a few paragraphs from last week.  Taliya is talking to the slaver with the merchant caravan fleet, hoping to find Luzita.  (This part is still in revision so squint because I haven’t gotten to it yet.)


“Does she have a specialty?  It might make it easier to find her that way.”  As he spoke he guided her into a small room set up as an office and keyed up a view screen.

“No,” Taliya said softly. “She has no specialties.”  It was true, she thought.   Luzita was a younger daughter with no chance of inheritance.   She had been raised to be nothing more than a socialite, a jewel on the arm of a son of a wealthy house, bartered away to increase her family’s fortunes, and she had barely made it through school.   

Her guide nodded and began the search.  “What is her name?”

“Luzita Fronen.  She would have been purchased on Pendelia Four.”

“Luzita Fronen,” he echoed in a mutter as he searched the records for her.

“Luzita Fronen?” came another voice, and both of them looked toward the door of the room where another slaver stood.  “I’m beginning to think that we’re going to have to pay someone to take her.”

“Letham!  Not in front of a customer.”

“She’s here? You still have her?”

“We’ve had her for far too long,” Letham said. “Pendelia Four is where we got her and I don’t know what Marcelan was thinking.  I know what he was thinking with, but that’s beside the point.”












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7 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 3-18-2017

  1. Good to know Luzita isn’t going quietly and accepting her fate. It’s rather satisfying to know she’s making it as difficult as possible for those trying to enslave her.

  2. Jana Denardo

    Ah, she’s found her but man the slaver’s conversation doesn’t promise much about the condition she’ll be in.

  3. Sounds like Luzita can take care of herself! <3

  4. Ooh, she sounds feisty! Probably just as well!

  5. AM

    She sounds very feisty! I love it, but clearly the slavers don’t. Taliya should definitely take them up on the suggestion of paying her instead of the other way around.

  6. How awful to be raised to be a jewel on someone’s arm. My strong, independent self does not like the idea at all! :-)

  7. Sounds like Luzita is holding her own!

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