Sunday Snippet September 18, 2016

Following from last week’s snippet from the totally unedited Book 9 of The Academy of the Accord.

 

Autheren cried out when Barlen grabbed him and all of the Warders were on their feet.  Brythel and Jorsen, the two closest, pushed themselves between Barlen and Autheren, forcing Barlen to take a few steps backward and release his grip as Rahmael, Draethlen and Terhesh joined them.

Autheren, free of Barlen’s grasp, scrambled to his feet and started for the door, but Jorsen grabbed him, holding him.  “It’s all right,” he assured him.  “You’re safe.”

“No,” Autheren said. “I – I have to go…”  He looked back in terror.  “He’ll make me go back and I can’t… I can’t go back.”  Desperately he broke free of Jorsen’s arms and bolted for the door.  Jorsen cast a quick glance at the others and went after him as the other cadets blocked Barlen from pursuing them.

Then Marsden, Kordelm, Wellhym, Yhonshel, and Radenth reached the table, along with Vinadi, Torlew, and Caristen, all of them blocking Barlen from going after Autheren.  Draethlen glanced at the others and touched Terhesh’s arm and the two of them went to help Jorsen as Rahmael backed the rest of the apprentices away from the scene and stood in front of them, his hand on the hilt of his sword, dark eyes never leaving Barlen’s form.   

 

(Yes, I know I dumped a bunch of names there, but by this point in the series the readers will be familiar with all of them.)

 

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10 responses to “Sunday Snippet September 18, 2016

  1. Nice snippet–great that they all want to help.

    • It’s not a matter of “wanting” to help. They are Warders — they have an instinct to protect wizards and they all sensed a threat to Autheren. They simply HAD to respond, it wasn’t even a conscious thought.

  2. A real slew of names. I don’t remember all of them.

  3. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Great response all at once.
    Yes, there were a lot of names there, but I see the reason for it.

  4. I understand the reasoning for the names and I accept that by now a reader would know all these people…but just a suggestion, since part of this activity is to entice new readers (am I right? am I wrong?) sometimes one can edit a snippet from the published version to simplify or whatever. I did glaze over as well at the litany of names. That being said, I am enjoying this series of snippets and the world you’re revealing.

  5. I imagine it will take awhile for him to realize that his new friends have his bac.

  6. elainecsc2013

    Based on what we’ve learned so far, the boy needs all the warders he can get.

  7. Oooh, Barlen is going to be in trouble now! LOL. I wonder what has him so afraid of going back that made him bolt. Poor guy.

  8. I agree about all the names. I think you could have said “all the warders” to simplify, at least for the purpose of these snippet. It makes it easier for prospective readers to focus on the main characters in the scene. Enjoyed the snippet as always.

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