Rainbow Snippet for 6-4-2016

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Rainbow Snippets is a group for LGBTQ+ authors, bloggers, and readers to gather once a week and share six sentences from a work of fiction–a WIP or a finished work or even a 6-sentence book recommendation (no spoilers please!).   Check out all the other awesome snippets by clicking on the picture above.

Posting from Onyx Sun, a science fiction novel that is currently in revision and which I’m hoping to publish later this month.  (Those of you who participate in Sunday Snippets may remember parts of this.)

There may or may not be some creative punctuation involved in the following text.


“We’ve reached an agreement on the contract.”

“When are you planning to return?”

“I’ll be leaving in the morning, as soon as the freighters have set down so I have a clear flight path.”

“When you get back I have another assignment for you.  Oh, and your grandmother died yesterday.”

“Pendelia Four is now visible on the monitor.”

The automated voice snapped Taliya Swann back to the present long enough for her to silence it and turn off the visual.  She had neither need nor desire to see an image of the planet, and not even the thought of Luzita could dispel her dread as she returned to her home world.

Taliya had flown Swann Corp’s private transport ever since she had been licensed; her mother saw no need to pay extra for a pilot when she could do it.  Now, for the first time since she had received her license she turned control of the company ship over to the port’s computers.  The ship had been on autopilot for the entire trip from the Roseeba Sector, and so had she.




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13 responses to “Rainbow Snippet for 6-4-2016

  1. Gem

    The technical background, her attention to duty, still the unspoken, unacknowledged grief seems very real in final sentence. “The ship had been on autopilot for the entire trip from the Roseeba Sector, and so had she. “

  2. Ouch! Poor Taliya, getting the news of her grandmother’s death that way!

  3. louiselyons013

    What a horrible casual way to announce the death of her grandmother!

  4. Jana Denardo

    The casual way the death of her grandmother was relayed is attention getting.

  5. Geez :-(
    Oh, and by the way, here’s a punch in the gut. Poor woman. That’s such a terrible way to be given sad news.

  6. Quinn

    Wow, stunning twist at the end.

  7. velvetpanic

    nicely done!

  8. OH man, that’s a terrible way to tell someone of their grandmother.

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  10. I get a very good picture of her mother here. I already hate her.

  11. Ouch. The casual cruelty of that announcement and the hint of isolation in her flight routine build together nicely.

  12. What a horrible way to learn of your grandmother’s death!

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