Sunday Snippet May 1, 2016


Posting from Book 5 of The Academy of the Accord.  Marsden rescued Draethlen from an orphanage and is bringing him home to the school, but they stop in town first.  Draethlen is resting on a bench in the town square while Marsden runs a couple errands.

(Note: first round edits of this book are still in progress.  As Charley says, “Squint.”)


“Freak!” a voice called

There was a cry of pain and fear and Draethlen opened his eyes to see that a gang of boys had cornered someone in white robes and Draethlen was on his feet and moving toward them.

“Stop it!”  He was too far away and their victim cried out in pain and fear as another rock struck home.

“What is it, anyhow?” one asked

“Some sort of freak, that’s what.”

“I think it’s afraid of us,” another said, then stared.  “Hey! It’s a girl!  Let’s have some fun!”

And then they were swarming her, and she cried out in terror as hands — too many hands — clutched and grabbed at her. 


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16 responses to “Sunday Snippet May 1, 2016

  1. Uh oh–bullies–I feel sorry for her. Great snippet!

  2. That sounds like a lot of trouble up ahead. Damn boys taking it on the weaker one.

  3. No … that doesn’t sound good. I hope someone will help her.

  4. Yikes…rock-throwing. Bullies on steroids. Hope someone’s about to come to the rescue.

  5. Oh, no! I see this going horribly wrong!

  6. Dramatic scene, instantly evokes sympathy for the poor person being attacked. Very effective snippet.

  7. Hurry! Get to her fast!

  8. I think Draethlen is about to have an opportunity to be a hero.

  9. I agree with Ed. I don’t think Draethlen is going to just sit idly by and let them have their “fun.” Great snippet!

  10. Gem

    The scene vividly reveals the characters through action. Nice job!

  11. Someone’s about to open a can of whoopass… Good lead-in to action…

  12. I hope Marsden isn’t away too long because this could be all kinds of trouble!

  13. Tough time for Draethlen. This is a good glimpse into the world he lives in and will set a tone for the characters, for sure. :-)

  14. My blood is boiling from that already. Bunch of jerks. Oh I dearly hope Drae really kicks some ass.

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