Sunday Snippet February 21, 2016

Picking up from where I left off last week in Book Two of the Academy of the Accord series.  Creative punctuation warnings apply


The dark-haired boy looked at Marsden for a moment then turned to the figure on the ground behind him, crouching down and gently rolling him over; he fell to his knees as Marsden joined him, and looked up at him, tears sliding down his cheeks. 

Marsden knelt, putting a gentle hand on his shoulder while he felt for a pulse on the other boy.  “I’m sorry, son,” he said quietly. 

“I… I was too late.”

Marsden looked at the stolen food, now scattered near the body, and the scene became clear to him; the boy had returned to find his friend being beaten and kicked by the other two and had dropped everything to step in to defend him.

“It’s not your fault, son,” Marsden said, his voice quiet, and the boy looked up at him.

“You’re going to arrest me, aren’t you?”  

“Hadn’t planned on it.”  Marsden’s voice held a note of gentle amusement.  “What’s your name?”

“Kordelm.”  His light brown eyes were wary, wondering what the man wanted, but he shrugged inwardly:  it wouldn’t be the first time he’d pleasured a man, either for money or to avoid punishment.

“How long has your friend been coming here?”

“I – I don’t know, I never met him.”  He looked up at Marsden.  “I was just coming down the alley and they were attacking him and… and I had to step in, had to stop it…”

“You’d never seen him before?”

“No, sir.”

“His name was Portri, and he was an apprentice wizard. I was looking for him, but apparently found him too late.”  He stood up, picking up the broken body of the young boy.  “Come on. Let’s get him to where he can have a proper burial, then let’s you and me have a talk.”

“About what?”

Marsden smiled at the wariness and defiance in the boy’s voice.

“Your future.”  


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12 responses to “Sunday Snippet February 21, 2016

  1. That last line is awesome. I’m sure the boy never considered anything like that before.

  2. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Sad for the one who died, but now Portri may have a promising future. Enjoyed the snippet and want to know more. :)

  3. Intriguing last line. Interesting post.

  4. Kordelm seems like a person with a great sense of right and wrong, and honor. I’m hoping his life will take a better turn now. Really an excellent excerpt.

  5. Great characterization for both of them. Really looking forward to reading more!

  6. Hmm…his future? I’m not sure he might not be putting himself in some danger… Good snippet, Paula. Quite visual.

  7. siobhanmuir

    Oh yeah, this kid is going to be a helluva guardian. Great snippet. P.T. :)

  8. I like this boy. He’s well worth helping.

  9. chellecordero

    Marsden sounds like a caring individual. Poor Kordelm for feeling so guilty that he couldn’t help the other young boy in time. Very intriguing story.

  10. Jennifer Reynolds

    My heart breaks at the thought of the things the boy has had to do to survive. Great snippet.

  11. I think…you have just managed to render me completely speechless on this snippet. My heart breaks for the young wizard to die so cruelly, but I almost want to smile at Kor’s compassion. To face such hardships and have to live as he had to survive, and still have that kind of heart when he didn’t even know the boy…it is truly a gift not seen often. I love that contrast between his thieving nature and means to survive, yet still manages to hold onto his heart and goodness. Love the contrast of the defiance in him despite the wariness and hardship, it tells so much of his character and personality in so little.

    I love this snippet. Seriously, you have really rendered me speechless and I’m staring at my computer screen at this scene. My heart breaking and warming all at once. Do a little happy dance for this one.

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