Sunday Snippet October 11, 2015

Picking up from last week with more from Onyx Sun.   Taliya has just been given the news that her mother, Maureena, is not the heiress to Swann House – she is.

Taliya speaks first.

(Aelind Osbert is the attorney for Swann House.)


“What?  But I was at Aelind’s–”

“I don’t care what Aelind Osbert may have told you, Taliya.  He’s so deep in Maureena’s pockets that he flosses with the lint.”

She opened her mouth to protest, but closed it again.  She couldn’t argue with his assessment of the family attorney, especially not as she shared it.   Still, she shook her head in denial; there was no way that she was the heiress, not as long as Maureena was alive.

“Taliya, listen to me.  Maureena was my wife.  But Ardelia, your grandmother, was my mother, not hers.”


“Eat your stew and I’ll tell you about it.”











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12 responses to “Sunday Snippet October 11, 2015

  1. I absolutely LOVE this line: “He’s so deep in Maureena’s pockets that he flosses with the lint.” Well done, PT!! Great snippet. :-)

  2. chellecordero

    Wow, the family dynamics are really intriguing. Great job of grabbing the reader’s need-to-know.

  3. Yep. I’m with Teresa – that line about the lint pulled me right in. Nice writing, PT, and the reveal about the family dynamics has me thinking conspiracy.

  4. Karen Michelle Nutt

    She didn’t realize her grandmother had been her father’s mother? Can’t wait to hear more. Great scene.

  5. siobhanmuir

    Oh ho, the plot thickens. His mom? Well, well, well. Great snippet, PT. :)

  6. The pocket/lint line was wonderful! I can’t wait to hear how the confusion about whose mother the grandmother actually was arose!

  7. The floss line is wonderful, and I like the family complication.

  8. Interesting! Wonder how the story unfolds.

  9. Love this one: He’s so deep in Maureena’s pockets that he flosses with the lint …. and I like how there’s another twist in the story.

  10. Yes, please tell us about it… You’ve baited the hook well.

  11. Oh I love that little piece of gold line about the lint. I love the whole plot twist.

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