Sunday Snippet July 5, 2015

More from Onyx Sun, a science fiction novel currently in second round edits, which are sort of on hold while I do Camp NaNoWriMo with a goal of 62,000 words this month.

In this snippet, Taliya is meeting with Aelind Osbert, the attorney for Swann House to claim the inheritance her grandmother left her.

The usual creative punctuation warnings apply.



“Ah, my dear Miss Swann, please accept my condolences for your loss.”

“Losses,” Taliya thought with a pang, but she would not bring that up with him.  She had no illusions about this man: his allegiance was completely with Maureena, and with the retainer that she paid him. Anything she said in this office would make it to her mother’s ears before she left the building.

“Thank you, Mr. Osbert.”  A lifetime of training kept her voice composed and calm as she shook his hand and took a seat, waiting with a sense of professional expectation that left him lightly flustered, causing him to fumble a bit as he took his own seat across the desk from her. “I know you are busy,” she said. “I thank you for making room in your schedule to see me so quickly after my return.”

“Yes, well…”  He coughed slightly and she suppressed a smile as his reaction told her everything she needed to know: the timing of this appointment had been carefully orchestrated to keep her as off balance as possible. 


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13 responses to “Sunday Snippet July 5, 2015

  1. Oh why … need to know more … great snippet

  2. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Interesting snippet. I’m glad she’s aware of what the meeting was suppose to do. She seems to be handling much better than Mr. Osbert.

  3. siobhanmuir

    I loved that she turned the flustering back on him. Great snippet, P.T. 🙂

  4. I love this, Paula! She won’t be pushed around any more!

    Can’t wait to see what her inheritance is–and his (and Maureena’s) assumptions about what she’ll do with it,

  5. A goal of 62,000 words this month? You Go, Girl!

  6. She’s got this. She is a tough cookie.

  7. I definitely like that she’s keeping him off balance – satisfying! Great snippet.

  8. Good. He’s flustered. Nice excerpt.

  9. I see the problems continue. I wonder when she is going to be free of her mother.

  10. Score one for Taliya! Or maybe this is score two, or three. I love how she’s throwing curveball after curveball in her mother’s direction and throwing them all off balance. I love this character. Osbert seems like a shady guy too, I don’t blame her for keeping things closed and professional. Great snippet!

  11. chellecordero

    I have a feeling she won’t be getting any “real” inheritance, Maureena is too greedy, she;ll devise a plan. I’m sure Taliya is right not to trust the lawyer.

  12. Ah… having to interact with the enemy is always a dicey prospect. Well-captured.

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