Sunday Snippet June 21, 2015

Is Taliya free of her mother’s House yet?  Maureena is waiting in the foyer…

(For anyone new to this, I’m posting excerpts from Onyx Sun, a science fiction novel currently in the first round of edits.)

The usual creative punctuation warnings apply.


“Where are you going?”

“To find Luzita. I don’t where that will take me, but long as it isn’t here I’ll be happy.”

“And what are you going to do for money?”

She shrugged. “I’m a certified pilot.”

“I expect you’ll come crawling back sooner rather than later, once your so-called friends get tired of putting you up.”

“I do not intend to presume on their hospitality.   In case you didn’t hear me, Mother, I’m a certified pilot.  That means that I am capable of making my own way in the world, and that means that I do not need to rely on others to take care of me.”  

“Where is the file from Roseeba Seven? I want to look it over and put it away.”

“It’s in my HoverWing. I will leave it at Aelind’s office tomorrow: you can pick it up there after I leave.”

She stepped outside, feeling an odd satisfaction at the stunned disbelief on her mother’s face: if Maureena had expected a meek and dutiful daughter then she hadn’t been paying attention – Taliya had stopped being meek and dutiful years before.





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10 responses to “Sunday Snippet June 21, 2015

  1. That a girl, Taliya! Stick it to her. (No I do not still secretly wish that she would have punched her though… Maybe… I plead the fifth…)
    Great snippet, P.T.

  2. She’s taking charge … love her confidence.

  3. That’s not as heated as expected. I thought her mum would jump on her to restrain her and kick her in.

  4. siobhanmuir

    *fist pump!* Nicely done, P.T. I would change one thing: “I am capable of making my own way in the world” – I’d change “world” to “universe” given they’re space-faring folk now. Great snippet. :)

  5. I agree with Daelyn, except it isn’t much of a secret that I want Maureena to suffer a broken nose as well as the collapse of everything she holds dear–which apparently doesn’t include her daughter.

    You have a true talent for creating bad guys that get on my final nerve, in the best way, Paula! :D

  6. Go, Taliya! I wish she’d have punched her, too. Great snippet!

  7. Rife with conflict, P.T. Looks like she’s standing up for herself, and I like that.

  8. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Good for Taliya. So glad she stood up to her mother.

  9. elainecsc2013

    Love that last line.

  10. Well, it’s nice to see she’s got her mother somewhat on the defensive. But what this means for her in the long run… that I’m curious about. I don’t think Maureena is going to be stopped this easily.

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