Daily Archives: May 31, 2015

Sunday Snippet May 31, 2015

Posting a few excerpts from a rough draft of a science fiction novel called The Onyx Sun. I’ve been ignoring it for a while, but since I don’t hate it anymore I’m starting editing it this month.

Keep in mind this is a very rough draft of something that I hadn’t even looked at for several months.  Also, the snippet has has probably been a victim of creative editing.


Taliya Swann has been away from home negotiating a mining contract on another planet.  When she called to advise her mother (head of House/Company) that they had a contract, Maureena informed her that her grandmother had died the day before.  All that was left to look forward to was being reunited with her lover, Luzita.

Returning home, she found out that her grandmother’s funeral had been held the day she died, and that Maureena had sold her lover to an off world slaver that same day.

Having had it out with her mother, Taliya has gone to her room to pack.


Alone in her room – a room which should also contain Luzita but which had been stripped bare of any sign of her – Taliya nearly lost her struggle.  She would, she knew, break sooner or later, but for now she had to stay focused. 

It didn’t take long to pack and as she closed the suitcase she took a final look around her room.  She was leaving most of her things behind: she doubted that she would have much use for fancy dresses where she was going.

She stopped suddenly and sat down on her bed.  Where was she going?  She shook her head: it didn’t matter where, as long as it wasn’t here.  Resolutely she rose and made a final check of her suite.  Nothing of Luzita’s remained: no doubt Maureena had taken everything and sold her belongings to “recoup her losses,” and Taliya added that to an ever growing list of wrongs.

As she reached down to pick up her suitcase there was a knock on her door and she turned, bracing herself for another round with her mother.

“Come in.”





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