Daily Archives: May 17, 2015

Sunday Snippet May 17, 2015

Posting a few excerpts from a rough draft of a science fiction novel called The Onyx Sun. I’ve been ignoring it for a while, but since I don’t hate it anymore I’m starting editing it this month.

Keep in mind this is a very rough draft of something that I hadn’t even looked at for several months.  Also, the snippet has has probably been a victim of creative editing.


Taliya Swann has been away from home negotiating a mining contract on another planet.  When she called to advise her mother (head of House/Company) that they had a contract, Maureena informed her that her grandmother had died the day before.  All that was left to look forward to was being reunited with her lover, Luzita.

Returning home, she found out that her grandmother’s funeral had been held the day she died.  Shortly after that she learned that Maureena had sold her lover into slavery (to an off world slaver) because Luzita couldn’t afford to pay for her upkeep.  She brushed off Taliya’s outrage by saying she would find someone else, someone more suitable.  Taliya demanded to know when Luzita had been sold.


“The day your grandmother died.  I called the slavers’ consortium as soon as the death certificate was signed.”  She smirked.  “Of course, I did ask her about payment first, but when she verified that she couldn’t I made the call.”

“Why didn’t you tell me you wanted money?  I would have paid it.”

Maureena shrugged. “I didn’t know if the contract had been reached or not.  I didn’t want to disturb you during negotiations.”

“So if it hadn’t been, if I hadn’t called to tell you we had a contract, you wouldn’t have told me about Grandmother?”

“Of course not. I needed you to focus on your work.”

Taliya stared at her as a realization sank in.  “That’s why you wouldn’t let me take Luzita with me – you had this planned all along.”

Maureena shrugged.






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