Daily Archives: April 12, 2015

Sunday Snippet April 12, 2015

Posting a few excerpts from a UFO (UnFinished Object) that is in my “Novels I’m Ignoring” file.  It’s a rough draft of a science fiction novel called The Onyx Sun and I just reread it and I don’t hate it anymore so it might get edited and finished someday.

Keep in mind this is a very rough draft of something that I haven’t even looked at since last August or so.  Oh, and ignore weird punctuation.

This follows from last week in which Taliya learned that her grandmother died while she was away, negotiating a mining contract on another planet.

She has just returned home.


Taliya stared at the mansion that loomed before her: maybe it was because she had been called home for her grandmother’s funeral, but her mother’s house seemed overwhelmingly reminiscent of a mausoleum, and she shuddered as the ornate doors opened in response to her presence.  As she stepped into the empty foyer its vaulted ceiling and unadorned walls instantly made her feel stifled, suffocated: it was like this every time that she returned from having been away, as if the part of her that was real couldn’t pass through the doorway, and the part of her that did pass through was little more than a construct, created by her mother — or maybe for her mother.

“Mistress Taliya.”

She winced inwardly — she hated being called Mistress — and turned to face the speaker.

“Regino.”  Her voice was warm as she greeted the butler, even as her eyes darkened with worry: the man was not making eye contact with her, a sure sign that either she was in trouble or that she was not going to like what he was going to tell her.  “Where is Mother?” she asked. 

“She is in her office.  She said she had a few things to take care of.”

“Grandmother’s funeral?”

Regino looked even more uncomfortable.  “I am sorry,” he said.  “It was held the day that she passed.”







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