Sunday Snippet March 22, 2015

Picking up from last week with another snippet from one of the books in The Academy of the Accord series.   (The series is still a work in progress and so is this scene.)

A few notes first because regardless of where this scene ends up it’s dropping you into the middle of a book in the middle of a series.

The Academy of the Accord is a school that trains both wizards and warriors.

Wellhym (and Kordelm) are in charge of the first year cadets and are the seconds in command of the school’s garrison.

Jorsen is a first year cadet – roughly 10 years old. He is… sort of a laughing stock, picked on by kids that are more coordinated.

Marsden is the commander of the garrison. Vinadi is the headmaster of the school.

A Warder is a warrior with an instinct to protect wizards. (And I need to find a different word for “Warder” because it’s kind of hard to pronounce.)

The usual rough draft and creative sentence structure warnings apply.

We pick up from last week — Wellhym has just told Jorsen that he’s a lot like he was at his age: awkward, uncoordinated, and more of a danger to himself than to others.

(The “them” that is mentioned is the school leaders — Wellhym is recounting a meeting they had about the new students.)

 

“You, sir?”  For the first time there was a spark of hope mixed with the disbelief in Jorsen’s voice. 

“Like you, I had the strength, but not the grace.  And I reminded them of that fact and assured them that you would grow into yourself.  Do you know what Marsden said?”

Jorsen shook his head.

“Make sure you keep him alive until he does.”

Jorsen managed a smile and Wellhym reached over and gave his shoulders a squeeze.  “I have faith in you, Jorsen. Don’t let me down.”

“I – I’ll try not to, sir.”

“The only way you can let me down is by quitting.  As long as you’re trying, you’re making me – making all of us – proud.”

“Y-yes, sir.”

There was a choke in the boy’s voice and this time the tears that threatened to spill from his eyes were ones of pride and determination.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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17 responses to “Sunday Snippet March 22, 2015

  1. That’s a good advice! Then fake it until you make it!

  2. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Wonderful pep talk and great advice!

  3. And that is how it’s done!

    This is such a good scene, Paula. 🙂

  4. That is good advice–I’m anxious to see what happens next.

  5. Sweet, emotional scene. He’s a great mentor.

  6. I really love these characters! What a great story. 🙂

  7. “Make sure you keep him alive until he does.” That’s certainly an ominous line, yet you lace it with a little hope too. Very nice.

  8. chellecordero

    Much needed words of compassion have certainly helped this young man.

  9. Perfect! And as everybody else said, great advice, not only advice, but a motto for life.

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