Sunday Snippet February 22, 2015

This is an excerpt from my current project.  This is a very rough first draft and may or may not have been creatively edited to fit the 10 sentence limit.

This continues from last week (and may be a touch over the limit, but I’m hoping to move on to something else next week.)

 

“But?” Arrek prompted. 

“I’m sure you don’t want to listen to me babble about something that happened over a decade ago.”

“That sounds like Berrebren talking.”

“It probably is but he’s probably right,” Ta’elsin replied, shrugging as he glanced at the warrior. “What do you think of Berrebren?”

“I think he is cold, condescending, and has an over inflated sense of his own importance.”  He smiled.  “My grandfather would have said that if you could buy him for what he’s worth and sell him for what he thinks he’s worth you’d have made your fortune and would never have to work another day in your life.”

Ta’elsin choked back a guilty laugh and Arrek smiled. “How close am I?”

“I… think I should probably not agree with you.”

“At least not out loud?”

Ta’elsin stared at him for a moment and burst into laughter.  “Yes.  At least not out loud.”

 

 

 

(The prologue is available on Wattpad if you’d like some background information.)

 

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34 responses to “Sunday Snippet February 22, 2015

  1. Oh, I do love Arrek. Enjoyed the snippet. Great banter.

  2. I think this is probably one of my favorite snippets from you. So true words about self worth! Love the easy chat between the two. This whole snippet made me immensely happy to see them getting along so well. Loved it! 🙂

  3. Nice snippet, love the dialogue, well done.

  4. Great chemistry between these characters is revealed in the dialogue. Nicely done! I really liked this line: “…if you could buy him for what he’s worth and sell him for what he thinks he’s worth you’d have made your fortune and would never have to work another day in your life.”

  5. Gem

    A playful conversation that reveals more of Berrebren’s unappealing personality as well as the chemistry between Ta’elsin and Arrek. Great snippet.

  6. Finally, someone said it! I love this passage, Paula—it’s perfect. 🙂

  7. LOL! Love this. Terrific snippet.

  8. siobhanmuir

    Bwahahahaha! Awesome analogy. I know a few people like that. Great snippet, P.T. 🙂

  9. Loved this snippet. Had a good laugh. Great convo between the two.

  10. chellecordero

    I LOVED this saying “My grandfather would have said that if you could buy him for what he’s worth and sell him for what he thinks he’s worth you’d have made your fortune and would never have to work another day in your life.” and I read above how you took that from your own grandfather, ingenious. I really liked the banter between the two and how well Arrek seems to know Ta’elsin. Great snippet.

  11. Buy low, sell high.
    Nice 8!

  12. Loved the grandfather statement, and I think they’re right about him. He does come across as cold and aloof.

  13. Great dialogue. What they say says a lot about their characters.

  14. Love the dialogue and the grandfather’s comment.

  15. Lol. It’s great to see their bond building (or re-appearing), given that only one of them remembers the other.

  16. I love the image that popped into my head when he “choked back a guilty laugh” Great stuff!

  17. I need to get one of those Berrebren to sell off. Do you have one more, I think I might have some buyers. Joke aside I loved that dialog, so very friendly.

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