Sunday Snippet December 7, 2014

This is an excerpt from this year’s NaNoWriMo novel, which is still a WiP.  It doesn’t have a real title yet (the Word doc is called “T&A” for Ta’elsin and Arrek, the main characters) but I gave it a working title of Betrayal for NaNo and Wattpad purposes. This excerpt follows from last week, although I’ve skipped a couple lines of dialogue.   (The prologue is available on Wattpad if you’d like some background information.)

(This is a very rough first draft and may or may not have been creatively edited to fit the 10 sentence limit.)


Berrebren is the first speaker.


“What has gotten into you?  You were more than eager to come along on this trip when we started out.”

“I don’t know, I just…”  Ta’elsin looked at the walls again and shuddered, plagued by something that he couldn’t quite put his finger on.

Berrebren watched him for a moment, frowning slightly. “You don’t remember this place, do you?”

“I don’t… I don’t know.  I think I should but…”

“It’s been thirteen years – I’m sure it looked different to you then.”

Thirteen years.  Ta’elsin’s mind shied away from the events of thirteen years ago but he nodded:  thirteen years ago Sagyl had carried him away from a place of pain and terror.  It had taken over a year for the nightmares to end and Ta’elsin did not want them to start again.


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24 responses to “Sunday Snippet December 7, 2014

  1. looks like he’s about to open a can of worms 😦

  2. This doesn’t sound as if it is going to be pleasant. I’m betting he suppressed those memories for a reason. Great snippet.

  3. I don’t think it was such a good idea to come back.

    • Ta’elsin didn’t know what he was getting into. (Ta’elsin spends a lot of time not knowing what he’s getting into, but he didn’t know this was the city that he was rescued from as a child.)

  4. dun dun dun…great snippet this week, can’t wait to read more.

  5. Oh, poor guy. Paula, you create the most sympathetic characters! I just want to give him a hug and a beer. 🙂

  6. Karen Michelle Nutt

    He suppressed those memories, didn’t he? This can’t be good.

  7. Very intriguing! Can’t wait for more!

  8. siobhanmuir

    Oh, that sounds bad. Great snippet. P.T. 🙂

  9. elainecsc2013

    So curious! Something bad must have happened here.

  10. Gem

    Sounds ominous. I like the way you give just a hint of his background.

  11. Nice teaser … I’m hooked and want to know more about the “events”, the terror and his nightmares. Great snippet!

  12. Wow–nice snippet–I can feel his terror.

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