More from Sanguine, a science fiction novel (still being edited) with elements of semi-paranormal M/M romance. I’m picking up from last week with Kaen’s first meeting with Constin, the first of his people (other than Gregor) that he is meeting.
And pay no attention to random punctuation and run on sentences as I try to squish this bit into the limit.
“Master.” Constin’s voice was a choked whisper. His right hand fumbled at his belt for a moment then he drew out a small ceremonial dagger. His eyes never left Kaen’s face as he pulled back his left sleeve and made a quick cut. Blood welled up in the wound and Kaen inhaled deeply.
“I offer freely that which you need.” He raised his wrist to Kaen. “Drink deeply of my life, my lord.”
Kaen gently took his arm and wrapped his lips around the wound, closing his eyes as he savored the taste and power of the blood, freely given, blood which seemed to have been waiting just for him – blood which had been waiting just for him.
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At least, Kaen is never going to be running out of blood now.
Nope, Kaen is not going to have to worry about running out of blood. But is he going to have to worry about jealousy?
Oh, just read your response. Good question. Will there be jealousy. Great snippet.
Time will tell…
Well, now, that’s a generous first meet.
That family has been waiting for generations for their lost Master to be found. They cannot help but respond to Kaen — and he cannot help but respond to them.
A living sacrifice?
A well that never runs dry?
Hmmm….
Nice 8!
Thanks! Gregor’s family was bonded to Kaen so far back that the origin is just a myth.
I cringe at your descriptions of blood (I’m squirmish), it’s that good!
Thank you. Lots of blood description in this — it’s why a friend of mine refuses to read it. LOL
the description, I mean, it’s so good that it makes me squirm 😉
Oh, dear, jealousy on Gregor’s part might rear it’s nasty head. And yeah, what is Kaen thinking? Also, you repeated the same phrase (I’m sure in emphasis, but it seems repetitious and drags the reader out of the story). Maybe the last phrase could be “A blessed gift for his line alone”, something that makes it obvious that it is meant for him without saying it twice. Great snippet, PT.
Hmmm… Yes, that was meant as emphasis. Such things don’t pull me out of the story but I’ll fix it for others. Thanks.
As for what Kaen is thinking… I don’t think he is. He was nervous about meeting Constin, but that evaporated as soon as he saw him and felt the pull of his blood.
Yuck. He sounds pretty creepy with his blood lust. I love the way you show his anxiety with the fumbling at the belt. This is a great snippet.
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Thank you. Kaen’s a vampire — the need for blood is normal for him, and the blood of this family is especially potent for him.
Oh, Paula, I teared up. They’ve both been waiting so long . . .
I liked the repetition at the end, though an emphasis on had in the last sentence (which is how I read it) might help some readers?
Glad you liked it. I had thought about italicizing had, so maybe I’ll try that. Thanks!
Whoa. Now that’s a powerful scene. I wouldn’t change a word of it. I was there.
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it and that it drew you in. I’ll be posting more from this scene next week.
How much did Gregor know to start with?
A lot more than Kaen did!
This is great for Kaen, but what about Gregor? Will he be jealous?
Wait and see…
I just love this! Truly. It’s very vivid. 🙂
Thank you. I’m glad you like it.
Beautifully captured. Your imagery is very powerful.
Thank you! 🙂