More from Sanguine, a science fiction novel (still in progress) with elements of semi-paranormal M/M romance.
(Sanguine is out to my beta readers now, but still being refined and revised, so this is still a work in progress and the following lines may or may not have been hacked and recombined and creatively punctuated to fit into 10 sentences.)
If you want to pick up from the beginning, I started weekly excerpts from this in October.
Picking up from last week: Kaen has fed from Gregor again – too much, too soon.
Blue eyes fluttered open. “Master,” he whispered. His breathing was shallow and ragged as he curled his fingers in Kaen’s hair. “Thank you.”
“Gregor,” he whispered. “We cannot do this… not until you are stronger… I am going to be the death of you, and I do not want that.”
Gregor smiled. “I can think of no better death than that, Master.” He leaned up and kissed him. “In your service,” he murmured, his eyes drifting closed.
Kaen looked at him in wonder. “I have had willing Blood Slaves before,” he said softly, gently stroking Gregor’s cheek with the back of his fingers. “But never like you… never like this…”
Gregor kissed him again and Kaen sank into the kiss, surrendering to the feelings, to feelings he thought he had long forgotten, feelings that he did not know he had ever had.
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Very good!
Thanks!
Ah, that Gregor…he’s irresistible. 🙂
Kaen certainly finds him irresistible!
The chemistry between these two characters is amazing. You’re doing a great job with this story!
Thanks!
I’m so happy he is not dead yet, I really thought last week was the end of him.
Gregor is tougher than he looks.
Great snippet, PT. I have a suggestion for the last line. Instead of “to feelings he thought he had long forgotten, feelings that he did not know he had ever had.” where the two clauses contradict each other (he’d thought them long forgotten so he known them before, and if he didn’t know he’d ever had them, he can’t know, right? ), I’d change the last clause to “feelings both old and new together.” This keeps the wonder and yet doesn’t negate his previous experience of them. Looking forward to this tale in it’s entirety. 🙂
I agree about the contradiction, but I kind of like the rhythm of the repetition there. Would maybe changing the comma between the clauses to an ‘and’ work?
I can try that, Sarah. As I said, this bit is being a pain.
That bit is problematic for one of my beta readers, as well. Kaen has lost all memory of his people, his home — and of his feelings for them. I’m floundering pretty badly at showing that he is starting to remember things that he didn’t know he’d forgotten.
Then instead of “feelings he did not know he’d ever had” could be “feelings he couldn’t remember having.” He’s had them but with memory loss he wouldn’t be able to remember them, yet they’d seem familiar like deja vu. Does that touch on it better?
Love the chemistry these too have!
Thanks! Sometimes things work out in spite of me. LOL
Oh, Gregor . . . if only you had a slightly older brother who felt the same way about middle-aged human women . . . 🙂
No older brother, but he does have two available uncles…
Very touching scene, really enjoying this story. Another excellent excerpt…
Very powerful scene with depths and layers of intricacy. Very nice.
Thanks! There are depths not revealed yet…
Nice chemistry!
Thank you!
They’d better find a medical answer.
It’s not medicine that they need… But I now have the song “Bad Medicine” stuck in my head, thank you very much! LOL
It just goes to show you love will be the death of you if you’re not careful! A very intimate scene, PT.
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Thanks! And I’d say that love sucks, but given that this is a vampire story, sort of, that would be a really bad pun…
Well done, PT.
Thank you.
I didn’t expect such tenderness between them. I still hope the poor guy survives.
Thanks. And Gregor is tough — he’s a survivor.
Interesting & well done. {Now I need to go back and read what’s happened previously!}
Thanks! I hope you enjoy the previous bits.