Sunday Excerpt — December 22, 2013

More from Sanguine, a science fiction novel (still in progress) with elements of semi-paranormal M/M romance.

(This is still a work in progress and the following lines have been hacked and recombined and creatively punctuated to fit into 10 sentences.)

If you want to pick up from the beginning, I started weekly excerpts from this in October.

Skipping a bit from last week, Gregor has been drifting in and out of sleep and is finally fully conscious.  Asking Kaen how long he has been there, he learns that it has been five days, and panics, as he was supposed to report back to the refitters’ shop after the inspection.

 

Kaen chuckled and kissed him, and everything else faded from his mind as he clung to the vampire’s arms for support, losing himself in the feel of his lips.   

“You resigned,” Kaen said softly.  “You signed on with me, remember?” 

“Yes, but…”

“Do not worry.  It has all been taken care of.” 

Kaen’s voice was soft and soothing and as he kissed him again Gregor’s mind floated away, cares falling and fading…

No, part of him said.  This isn’t right. This isn’t how it’s supposed to be.  With an effort he pulled his mind back to the present.  “Master.”

 

 

 

 

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16 responses to “Sunday Excerpt — December 22, 2013

  1. This is a very lyrical and beautiful snippet, probably one of the best you’ve posted so far. Excellent job!

  2. Kaen really drunk too much, George is going to get in trouble. This is getting scary.

    • Gregor is recovering from the blood-taking, this was something different, which is explained in the next post. But your comment lets me know that I need to be a bit clearer in what is happening now. Thank you!

  3. Ah! I was expecting external conflict (the other crewmen resenting Gregor’s connection with Kaen), but I wasn’t expecting problems within the relationship! I like the realistic touch—very nice, Paula!

    • Thanks, Sarah. This isn’t really the problem that it looks like it is — I had to stop here because of the line limit. (They will have a minor glitch due to the difference between words and actions, though.)

  4. Kaen has a way of making him forget all around him, but not completely. I’m intrigued to know what Gregor has to say.

  5. Feather Stone

    I like the feel of this snippet. I haven’t been following so I’m not sure who’s who, LOL. I gave myself a treat today and pulled away from my writing demands and looked in on the snippets. I love your writing style and the passion is strong in this. Please advise if you have two points of view – one from Kaen (….faded from his mind), and also from Gregor (mind floating …). Have I misunderstood?

    • Thanks, Feather!

      No, it’s all Gregor’s POV. Kaen is a vampire, and Gregor is his Blood Slave. Kaen’s kiss is a little overwhelming, driving all other thoughts out of Gregor’s mind.

  6. I knew that snippet ending with an answer was an anomaly! Looking forward to finding out how it’s supposed to be according to Gregor! 😀

  7. But has it all been taken care of?

  8. elainecsc2013

    I think Gregor doesn’t understand how Kaen really feels.

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