Sunday Excerpt — November 10, 2013

More from Sanguine, a science fiction novel (still in progress) with elements of semi-paranormal M/M romance.

(This is still a work in progress and the following lines have been hacked and recombined and creatively punctuated to fit into 10 sentences.)

Picking up from last week, Gregor has told Kaen that he knows he is a vampire, and has drawn a small golden dagger from his belt, asking Kaen if he recognized it.

Kaen rose slowly as he stared at the blade resting on the palm of Gregor’s hand. “Yes,” he said, his voice little more than a whisper as he stared at the ceremonial blade:  less than three inches from tip to heel, it held him enthralled.    

“Then you know what I am offering.”


Kaen could not seem to look away from the blade: it held him, entranced, mesmerized, and it drew him from behind his desk and he reached out and stroked one finger along the intricate etchings in the blade and licked his lips softly.    

“Do you accept?”

Kaen pulled his gaze away from the knife to stare into Gregor’s eyes. 

The man’s gaze was calm and steady: he knew full well what he was doing, what he was offering to the vampire and Kaen felt a shiver of anticipation run through him.


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22 responses to “Sunday Excerpt — November 10, 2013

  1. Kaen seems to have made his decision. I like how he only says “yes” and three time, wow.

  2. Very intense scene. Nicely done. :)

  3. historysleuth1

    Oh so not what I thought. AGH! What does it all mean? Great snippet there. Now I can’t wait till next week to see what this is all about! Well played Paula!
    History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders

  4. Well done! Drew me in. Makes me want to read more. Forcing the words into ten sentences seems to be a good thing. :)

  5. Intense and charged. Sometimes lots of words just aren’t needed :-)

  6. I want to know more. I love the way the scene played out. I could feel the intensity of the decision to say ‘yes’. Well done!

  7. Still now sure what the dagger means, but I hope we’ll find out.

  8. Maybe he’s going to become the vampire’s personal blood bank.

  9. I like the reversal in this—usually, it’s the vampire offering the human (or whatever Gregor is something in exchange, or just taking it. This time, it seems like Gregor is offering Kaen something he couldn’t or wouldn’t take otherwise?

    Either way, Gregor appears to be in a position of power, here. I really like that, too. :)

    • Thanks! I sort of invented my own vampire mythos for this so it probably doesn’t follow too closely to the standard/traditional vampire story. (Even without most of it taking place on a spaceship…)

  10. The instrument of death.
    Which is more dangerous — the tool or the one who holds it?
    Does Kaen fear either? Or is does he fear his own decisions?
    Well done!

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