Sunday Excerpt — October 27, 2013

More from Sanguine, a science fiction novel (still in progress) with elements of semi-paranormal M/M romance.

(This is still a work in progress and the following lines have been hacked and recombined and creatively punctuated to fit into 10 sentences – and I still went over a bit.)

Gregor has just finished doing a walkthrough of the new refitted starship with the captain, Kaen Yblis, and Kaen has transferred the funds for the final payment.  He looks up to find Gregor still standing in his office.

“Yes?”

Gregor took a deep breath and Kaen raised an eyebrow:  this was the first time he had seen the young man look nervous or uncomfortable in his presence.

“Captain, sir,” he said hesitantly, “have… have you given any thought to crew for the ship yet?”

“No, I haven’t,” Kaen replied, surprised by the question.  “Are you offering to sign on?”

“Yes, sir, I would like that, sir.”

“In what capacity?”

“Maintenance, sir – I was part of every bit of the refitting and I know this ship inside and out.”

“Yes, you do indeed,” Kaen murmured thoughtfully.  “Very well, Maintenance Chief.” 

Light blue eyes widened at the title and Kaen shrugged, an amused smile playing over his lips as he asked, “Who among your crew will know more about the ship?”

He studied the blond for a long moment.  

“There is something else, isn’t there?”

“Yes sir.”  Gregor hadn’t wanted to bring this up this soon, but maybe it was for the best:  gathering his courage he drew a deep breath and met the Captain’s gaze.   “I know what you are.”  

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20 responses to “Sunday Excerpt — October 27, 2013

  1. Wonder how the rest of the crew is going to feel about Gregor’s surprise promotion? I like that he seems surprised, too—I get the feeling he only wanted to be on board, not join admin (or whatever a starship would call it).

    And I’m imagining all the possible things our Captain could be . . . 😀

  2. Oh my! What is he? What is he? I also want to know!

  3. Bold of him to say that.
    Reminds me of the scene in an old movie where characters make an anon phone call and say, “I know who you are and I know what you did.”
    Nice job!

    • Thanks! (Your comment about Gregor being bold makes me want to go back and start the rewrite on this to fill in some stuff I left out in the original draft… But I have NaNoWriMo to get through first…)

  4. Ah! No fair, you can’t end it there–what is he?!
    Cool snippet! You hooked me and if I could keep reading right now I surely would.

  5. Ooh, intriguing!!! I definitely want to read more of this story. Excellent excerpt!

  6. Ah, talk about building tension. I’m a bit concerned for Gregor. My gut says the captain might be a bit shady.

  7. And he is? Intriguing excerpt 🙂

  8. Oh, you must tell us what he is! Great snippet!

  9. Leaving us hanging with a last line like that? How wonderfully evil of you! Well he’s got his first leg in the door, so to speak. 🙂
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