Sunday Excerpt — September 1, 2013

Another snippet from my current WiP, which is Book 4 of the Academy of the Accord series.

This week’s lines are from the opening of the book.  (A bit of creative punctuation has been used to get down to an acceptable number of sentences.)

 

“Marsden!” 

The warrior smiled and turned, raising a hand in greeting to his wizard, but his expression darkened in concern when he caught sight of him:  Vinadi’s movements were quick, almost abrupt, and his characteristic smile was gone, replaced by a look that hovered somewhere between anxiety and worry. 

“What’s wrong, Vinadi?”  Marsden put a hand on his shoulder and gave it a reassuring squeeze. 

“Do you have a moment to walk with me?”

“Always, my friend,” Marsden said, easily falling into stride with his wizard.  He said nothing, merely kept his hand on Vinadi’s shoulder, feeling him relax beneath his touch.

Vinadi studied Marsden out of the corner of his eye:  they had been through a lot together over the years, but this — this might test the bonds of their friendship. He shook his head:  Marsden was his Warder and he was Marsden’s wizard – there was nothing that could destroy the bond they shared. 

He hoped.  

 

 

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22 responses to “Sunday Excerpt — September 1, 2013

  1. Good setup – it’s clear what their roles are and that there’s conflict on the way.

  2. Uh-oh! That’s some major anticipatory tension there—I’m worried about the strength of their bond, and I don’t even know the situation, yet!

    Well done!

  3. Alex Jones

    I love this excerpt. I got a feel for the two characters in just a few lines, and I think you really capture their friendship in an easy and offhand manner. I’m also intrigued by the warder/wizard dynamic. Lots of interesting stuff!

  4. Karen Michelle Nutt

    I bet there’s trouble ahead for these two. Nice setup!

  5. Gem

    Great dialogue exchange and very adept addition of background setting. Smooth writing.

  6. Uh-oh…the tension is very thick on Venadi’s part. Something bad is definitely coming.

  7. Amazing foreshadowing, and such great, natural flow. Love this!

  8. siobhanmuir

    Oooh, great set up and foreshadowing, PT. Great snippet. 🙂

  9. You always can do with a great friend. I love the foreshadowing too.

  10. historysleuth1

    Tension build up there, good job! Not only is it something of grave importance to the story but also to their friendship. Double conflict. I like the term “my friend”, very much in keeping with the type of story. Great 8!
    History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders

  11. Nice building of the tension, it’s nice to see the hopes in the suspense. I wonder what secrets he has to tell.

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