Sunday Excerpt — August 3. 2013

It’s Sunday!  And I actually have the day off, so I might get comments posted before the end of the week for a change.

Thanks to everyone who stopped by and commented on  last week’s excerpt.  I think I’ll skip ahead a little bit (in the same novel: Song and Sword).

Marlia was badly injured and mostly unconscious, but her unicorn (Justice) carried her to safety, taking her to the campsite of another Elven traveler in the Human Realms:  Pashevel.   She wakes, confused.

Marlia woke to find her arms restrained: panic gripped her and she thrashed wildly as she tried to free herself, her breath coming in ragged gasps as she struggled.

“Easy,” someone said, a tinge of amusement running through his warm soothing voice.  “You might not want to throw off all of the blankets that are covering you.”

She froze at the sound and slowly turned her head to look at him.  His dark blue eyes held both humor and compassion, and a soft smile played over his full lips while a silver circlet tried –and failed – to restrain his thick black hair:  He had a slender graceful build and there was an air of gentleness about him that said that he was no threat to her, or anyone else. 

“Who are you?” she asked, trying to sit up.

“Lie still,” he said, placing a gentle hand on her shoulder.  “You’ve had a rough night and you don’t need to be breaking open any wounds.”

Involuntarily she jerked away from his touch and clutched at the blanket as it slipped from her torso.  “My clothes!  What have you done?”

“I treated your wounds as best I could,” he said quietly.  “Unfortunately your blouse did not survive.”  His lips twitched with humor as he nodded toward the pile of blood-soaked white silk that lay next to her.

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23 responses to “Sunday Excerpt — August 3. 2013

  1. Well described. I want to know more about him as well as what happened to her.

  2. That’s some first impression to make… on both sides!

  3. Great description. Pashevel sounds like he has a sense of humour. 🙂

  4. A practical elf with a sense of humor who isn’t hard on the eyes. I’m in! 😀

  5. Great visual. You put me right there in the scene and left me wanting more. Great job!

  6. What a way to wake up. I love his lines. 🙂 You’ve got a well rounded snippet here. Well done.

  7. Interesting first meeting. He sounds very appealing.
    Good job.

  8. Makes me want to come back for more. From one Wayne Co. girl to another… Great job!

  9. Great details! I want more.

  10. Wonderful description, and I love the touch of wry humor at the end about her blouse. Well done! I want to know more about these two.

  11. Great scene! You pull me in, making me want to read more. He’s quite some eye candy.
    I should learn to write longer sentences 🙂 Well done.

  12. siobhanmuir

    Intriguing spot to find yourself in. He definitely has her at a loss with not only the restraints but also her nakedness. Good snippet, PT. 🙂

  13. historysleuth1

    Good excerpt. Very descriptive. He sort of has a bit of dry humor about him. I know someone that you can’t tell if he’s joking or not. 🙂

  14. Better alive and her blouse in tatters than the other way around!

  15. Wow, last time she seemed to have mastered the situation. If he is not a threat, why is she restrained?

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